Artie Fox, daughter of Hermes

Name: Artemis Hannah Fox
Age: 15
God Parent: Hermes
Mortal Family: Abigail Fox (mom), Pine Fox (brother), Tom (stepfather)
Years in Camp: 4
Brief History: On a bright and sunny morning, Abigail was hanging out in Cetral Park, not caring about anything. Hermes was delivering a package to Demeter and spotted Abigail. He said hi and Abigail wanted to know if he wanted to rest, seeing that Hermes was a bit sleep deprived. Attracted by her beauty, Hermes said yes and they talked. The two got closer and you know how it works....

Artemis was born on a bright sunny August day. Her mother named her Artemis randomly and had no idea Artemis was a real goddess. Hermes warned against the name, but Abigail wanted it so badly, Hermes gave up. Artie lived her mom, peacefully for 9 years, until her mother married Tom and gave birth to Pine. Artie ran away, jealous of her brother and felt betrayed. She was found two weeks later by her mom and Tom and sent her to a private academy for delinquents. She made many friends but hated all of them, especially this kid who kept saying, "Go." to her. Artie went to 'school' there for 2 years, being a huge prankster, and was found by that kid who she hated the most when she reached 11. He took her to camp and she has been going there since, without her mother knowing. Well, she visits during winter with few monsters in her trail, but yeah.  

Physical Appearance: Artie has waist-length blonde hair, light blue eyes, freckles, a slight tan, and is sort of skinny. She's around 5'7. She usually wears a camp shirt with black skinny jeans or short shorts and grey worn-out sneakers. She almost never wears a sweatshirt. When she does, she wears a gray one.
Personality: Artie has been sneaky, funny, and annoying since she set foot in camp, being influenced by the Hermes cabin. She loved her step family, even when she ran away so she does have soft side. Artie also became protective and adventurous when she ran away. If you tick her off or when she wakes up in the morning, she's quite rude.
Fatal Flaw: She cares too much for Camp Half-Blood. If she had to choose to save the world or save the camp, she would pick the camp.
Talents: Good thief, being fast, and sneaky. Just like any Hermes kid.
Weapons: A bracelet that turns into a 4 foot bronze sword.
Other: Not much.

1.) The bio needs to be expanded. I'd add how Hermes and the mother met.
2.) Personality needs to be expanded a lot. Put description into it. Reasons why she's like that. Scenarios on how that's played.

Other than that looks good to me.

Thanks! Okay.....


How Abigail met Hermes: On a bright and sunny morning, Abigail was hanging out in Cetral Park, not caring about anything. Hermes was delivering a package to Demeter and spotted Abigail. He said hi and Abigail wanted to know if he wanted to rest, seeing that Hermes was a bit sleep deprived. Attracted by her beauty, Hermes said yes and they talked. The two got closer and you know how it works....

(New) Personality: Artie has been sneaky, funny, and annoying since she set foot in camp, being influenced by the Hermes cabin. She loved her step family, even when she ran away so she does have soft side. Artie also became protective, adventurous and rude when she ran away, but she doesn't like being rude sometimes.

If you could edit that in I'll approve it and we'll wait for another person to either correct something else or approve it also.

Name: Artemis Hannah Fox
Age: 15
God Parent: Hermes
Mortal Family: Abigail Fox (mom), Pine Fox (brother), Tom (stepfather)
Years in Camp: 4
Brief History: On a bright and sunny morning, Abigail was hanging out in Cetral Park, not caring about anything. Hermes was delivering a package to Demeter and spotted Abigail. He said hi and Abigail wanted to know if he wanted to rest, seeing that Hermes was a bit sleep deprived. Attracted by her beauty, Hermes said yes and they talked. The two got closer and you know how it works....

Artemis was born on a bright sunny August day. Her mother named her Artemis randomly and had no idea Artemis was a real goddess. Hermes warned against the name, but Abigail wanted it so badly, Hermes gave up. Artie lived her mom, peacefully for 9 years, until her mother married Tom and gave birth to Pine. Artie ran away, jealous of her brother and felt betrayed. She was found two weeks later by her mom and Tom and sent her to a private academy for delinquents. She made many friends but hated all of them, especially this kid who kept saying, "Go." to her. Artie went to 'school' there for 2 years, being a huge pranker, and was found by that kid who she hated the most when she reached 11. He took her to camp and she has been going there since, without her mother knowing. Well, she visits during winter with few monsters in her trail, but yeah.  
Physical Appearance: blonde hair, light blue eyes, freckles, a slight tan, and is sort of skinny.
Personality: Artie has been sneaky, funny, and annoying since she set foot in camp, being influenced by the Hermes cabin. She loved her step family, even when she ran away so she does have soft side. Artie also became protective, adventurous and rude when she ran away, but she doesn't like being rude sometimes.
Fatal Flaw: She cares too much for Camp Half-Blood. If she had to choose to save the world or save the camp, she would pick the camp.
Talents: Good thief and sneaky. Just like any Hermes kid.
Weapons: A bracelet that turns into a 4 foot bronze sword.
Other: Not much.

Onto your first post on this topic. If you could please edit it onto that. On the bottom right hand side of the post you'll see Edit. Click on it and put the renewed versions and everything in there.

Give me a sec....

Anyways, approved! Wait till my fellow mod or an admin comes by to say what they want.

Looks good to me, Approved.

Can I RP now?

If I can't, then what should I do?

(Sorry if I sound impatient, I just want to RP!)

Yes, you're approved, so you can rp now.

lol, it's fine. I understand.