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Post  Isrial on Fri Jan 31, 2014 11:19 pm

Name: Isrial Jefferson
Age:12
Godly Parent: Hephaestus
Mortal Family: Amanda Jefferson
Year's In Camp: 2
Brief History: 5 Years Before Isrial Came To Camp His Hands caught On Fire People Said He Was A Freak He Ran From home He Was Attacked Buy Monsters Left And Right Until He Ran Into Some kid Who Showed him To Camp But Isrial didn't Know What Was Happening he was Scared and hungry But Chiron Showed Him The Ways Of Being A Half-blood.
Physical Appearance: Isrial Is Scrawney With Small Muscles And Long Fingures
Personality:Nice and Funny But Serious In a Mechanic Kind of Way
Fatal Flaw: Isrial's Fatal Flaw Is That He Would Do Anything To Work With A Machine More Than Man
Talents: Can Summon Fire With His Hand And Can Build Stuff Fast
Weapons: His Weapon Is a Dagger

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Re: Application

Post  GeneralArin on Fri Jan 31, 2014 11:43 pm

Okay, so the thing needs to be longer across the board.
More details please. And punctuation. And less capital letters.


"Serious in a mechanic sort of way" doesn't make any sense. Please clarify.

I don't understand the fatal flaw at all.

No Hephaestus fire. It's a restricted fire and our quota has been filled.

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