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Post  Marita Black Thu Mar 20, 2014 9:52 pm

Name: Alexandra (Alex), Steadfast

Age: 14

God Parent: Hermes

Mortal Family: Jacklyn, Steadfast (died in fire)

Years in Camp: 1 year

History: Alex was born in Detroit. She took martial arts for self defense so when the monsters started attacking she had a little experience in fighting. She traveled a lot, but it was never very fancy. Her mom and her went all over the country, never in style, that is how her mom had attracted Hermes attention. Her mom died in a house fire when a phoenix attacked her at her home. She was ten at the time. She ended up killing the phoenix and got a red leather jacket out of the deal but the grief that came with it was what made the jacket so important to her. After that she started hitchhiking and ended up in New York. She lived in abandoned warehouses and found ways to survive. She met other Demigods but they often ended up splitting up. She started shop lifting and was realllllllly good at it. She mostly stole things to survive but she liked to steal spray paint too. She started a graffiti chain in every warehouse she went to. One day a monster attacked her and she was about to lose when a couple kids showed up with Greek weapons and killed the monster. They apparently had seen her Graffitti and followed the trail to the warehouse. She was brought to camp half-blood the day before her 13th birthday and was claimed the next night at the bonfire.

Physical Appearance: 5'5'' about 130 lbs. Dirty blond hair often in a messy bun. Bluish\green eyes. Constantly wears Converse (shoes.) She wears a leather jacket (a spoil of war from her first monster kill) She always has some sort of paint on her hands (spray paint, acrylic, oil, ect.) She also wears a wedding ring on a silver chain around her neck (her mother's. it survived the fire)

Personality: She's the kind of person that always looks like they have seen a lot more than they should have. She's clever and easily blends in. She doesn't smile that often but once she does she could have picked your pocket and stolen your belt without you noticing by the time you looked away. Things don't seem to startle her that much. If she gets competitive you want to watch out, she's sneaky and a bit of a sore loser. She won't publicly humiliate anybody but she will find sneaky ways to get back at them. She likes to spend a lot of time on the climbing wall or in the art pavilion. She also enjoys the wood and beach areas. She spends a lot of time with the Hephaestus and Athena cabins. She really likes fast reflex games, and games that involve sneaky strategy.

Fatal Flaw:When it comes down to it, she will walk away from her friends if she thinks the case is hopeless.

Talents: She's very good when it comes to art and hand to hand combat. She can do crazy stunts (backflips off of boulders, high dives into water off of Pegasus ect.) She can pick pocket so well that she can even do it to the other Hermes kids.

Weapons: Camera that turns into a gun when you take a photo. A spray paint can that can shoot fire. A bracelet that turns into a dagger, (for close fighting.)

Other: She can be one of the best companions if you just take a little bit of time to get to know her. Despite her "bug off" face she actually really enjoys the company of people she's just been through a lot. If you talk to her about art, be prepared to face an hour long conversation about it. She's a vegan but not a snot about it. She really enjoys fast reflex games too!
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Post  Marita Black Fri Mar 21, 2014 1:37 pm

I should probably switch her "Fatal Flaw" to a lack of patience. That way I can relate to her even more. =)
I'm trying my best to be patient... it doesn't help that I keep checking this sight every five minutes. lol
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Post  GeneralArin Fri Mar 21, 2014 4:02 pm

lol, Yeah, the Refresh Game is pointless but addicting. XP
Sorry for not getting to this yet.

Alright, for the app:
First of all, you've got quite a few magic objects. Can you cut it down to only one?
(And just a personal opinion, as interesting as a gun-camera would be, I think it'd be less practical since it requires ammo to function, and making a bullet takes much more work than crafting an arrow or a sword.)

In the personality: "She likes to spend a lot of time on the climbing wall or in the art pavilion. She also enjoys the wood and beach areas. She spends a lot of time with the Hephaestus and Athena cabins. She really likes fast reflex games, and games that involve sneaky strategy. "
These aren't really personality things, but rather interests and habits. So unless you can give a personality reason why she enjoys these, like intelligent, competitive, or artistic, I would take these out.
Then the Fatal Flaw has to link up with the personality more, I like the one you chose, just connect it more. And perhaps describe it more as well.
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Post  Marita Black Fri Mar 21, 2014 5:37 pm

So I added a bit to her history to explain the fatal flaw a bit more. I still think my fatal flaw is a little based more on trust than loyalty but I'm trying to make it work. Let me know if it's ok.

Name: Alexandra (Alex), Hunter

Age: 14

God Parent: Hermes

Mortal Family: Jacklyn, Hunter (died in fire)

Years in Camp: 1 year (lives year round at camp, because she has no other home)

History: Alex was born in Detroit. She took martial arts for self defense so when the monsters started attacking she had a little experience in fighting. She traveled a lot, but it was never very fancy. Her mom and her went all over the country, never in style, that is how her mom had attracted Hermes attention. Her mom died in a house fire when a phoenix attacked her at her home. She was ten at the time. She ended up killing the phoenix and got a red leather jacket out of the deal but the grief that came with it was what made the jacket so important to her. After that she started hitchhiking and ended up in New York. She lived in abandoned warehouses and found ways to survive. She met other Demigods but they often ended up splitting up, most of the time they betrayed her. She ended up befriending a total of 5 demigods and she put a little less loyalty in each one of them. There was so little loyalty left by the end that she couldn't use it on any person ever again. She started shop lifting and got really good at it. She mostly stole things to survive but she liked to steal spray paint too. She started a graffiti chain with images of the monsters she's fought, in every warehouse she went to. One day a monster attacked her and she was about to lose when a couple kids showed up with Greek weapons and killed the monster. They apparently had seen her Graffiti and followed the trail to the warehouse. She was brought to camp half-blood the day before her 13th birthday and was claimed the next night at the bonfire.

Physical Appearance: 5'5'' about 130 lbs. Dirty blond hair often in a messy bun. Bluish\green eyes. Constantly wears Converse (shoes.) She wears a leather jacket (a spoil of war from her first monster kill) She always has some sort of paint on her hands (spray paint, acrylic, oil, ect.) She also wears a wedding ring on a silver chain around her neck (her mother's. it survived the fire)

Personality: She's the kind of person that always looks like they have seen a lot more than they should have. She's clever and easily blends in. She doesn't smile that often but once she does she could have picked your pocket and stolen your belt without you noticing by the time you looked away. Things don't seem to startle her that much. If she gets competitive you want to watch out, she's sneaky and a bit of a sore loser. She won't publicly humiliate anybody but she will find sneaky ways to get back at them. She's not always very loyal because she has a hard time trusting many people. This makes her useful for spying because she's not afraid to hurt someones trust. (She realizes this, and it is the one thing in her personality she tries to work on the most. She does really try to have good friendships without hurting anyone though.)

Fatal Flaw:Her Fatal Flaw is her lack of loyalty. (Due to the past Demigods that had abandoned her for going over to the other side.) She has a hard time committing her self to anyone because of trust, but also because too many people had left her in the dirt (literally). Her loyalty was corroded down to pretty much nothing because what was the point of being loyal if it keeps being taken from you and then used to hit you over the head. That's why it is her fatal flaw, she doesn't have anybody that she thinks is worth being loyal too, and has nothing left in her that will allow her to still be loyal anyways. Because of all this she sometimes won't care if someone is trying to help her in a fight and instead do a little bit of her own thing. This could easily lead to her death or her "friends." She does realize this, and works on it, but it's still there.

Talents: She's very good when it comes to art and hand to hand combat. She can do crazy stunts (backflips off of boulders, high dives into water off of Pegasus ect.) She's a really good pick-pocketer, like most Hermes kids. She's also pretty talented with picking locks (hence the breaking into abandoned warehouses)

Weapons: Alex has a spray paint can that shoots fire (her signature) She carries two Celestial Bronze combat knives strapped to both legs for fighting.

Other: She can be one of the best companions if you just take a little bit of time to get to know her. Despite her "bug off" face she actually really enjoys the company of people, she's just been through a lot. If you talk to her about art, be prepared to face an hour long conversation about it. She's also a vegan but not a snot about it. She likes to spend a lot of time on the climbing wall or in the art pavilion. She also enjoys the wood and beach areas. She spends a lot of time with the Hephaestus and Athena cabins. She really likes fast reflex games, and games that involve sneaky strategy.


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Post  GeneralArin Fri Mar 21, 2014 8:19 pm

There should be an edit button at the bottom of your post, that'll help keep the topic a bit cleaner.

And I'm just shooting down the gold weapon, since they're functionally the same, just specialized to Roman or Greek. Other than that, it looks good.

I say approved, just wait for another staff to comment.
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Post  Cerulaen Sat Mar 22, 2014 2:58 am

Yeah, change the Imperial gold to Celestial bronze, please.

This app looks really well-rounded. I'm rather impressed, actually. My only thing is that I feel the Fatal Flaw is lacking a bit. I like that it's a lack of loyalty, since its seems like practically everyone and their mother has loyalty as a FF, but I feel like yours needs to be explained a bit better. The way you explain it makes it sound more like she just doesn't trust people, which I think is a bit different. Lack of loyalty would more be the incapability of staying true to someone and being someone people can't count on--being a flake, I suppose. It also doesn't say how this could lead to her own demise.

Fix that and you'll be good.
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Post  Cerulaen Sat Mar 22, 2014 10:52 pm

Okay, looks good. Approved--welcome to the site!
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Post  Marita Black Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:32 pm

Thank you so much! I'm so excited!
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