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Post  RubyWillDestroyYou on Wed Oct 15, 2014 10:32 am

Name: Ruby Dia (Die-UH) Beatrice Joan

Age: 14 (Newly Claimed)

God Parent: Ares (God of War, Violence and Blood-lust.)

Mortal Family: Janice L. Joan (Dead) James V. Joan [Step-dad] (Dead) Lily Joan [Twin sister; younger by 6 minutes] (Dead)

Years in Camp: 7 1/4th's of a month, (Not very long) [7 months and about 14 days....]

(Summer Only, she goes to the occasional Military School. Such fun.)


History: I'm not going to lie, most of her life is a mystery even to Ruby. She's known to keep her past a secret and rarely mentions anything of the sort... but if your really interested sit back and I'll give you the grand tour. Ruby was born in New-York, the big apple, the city of dreams, the place that'll chew you up and spit you out like broccoli, blah.

From age ten and up till bout now, Ruby's been a foster kid. She hates it there, lets just cut it short and put it down this way...She wasn't very well liked. None of the foster-parents could put up with her. Not going to say why, cause you'll figure that out real quick when you meet her. But before that, she lived with her addict mother and her drunken-slob for a stepdad. Her mother Janice, lets just say liked her wine a bit more than she should, but more than that she did certain drugs, trying not to be too specific but 'Illegal' drugs and not your common pharmaceuticals. A former solider in war, she started to slip after her return from Iraq.

Lost it, her sanity and mental capability that is.

Soon after that to make things worse she gave birth to two beautiful baby girls.

Whom she boldly named Ruby and Lily.

Though Caught up in they're mothers mess, weren't all well looked after. No matter what Ruby did, couldn't manage to gain her mothers love or attention. Which she only saw her daughters no more than two very regrettable deplorable condemnations. (Basically she thought they were disgraceful and unwanted by her.)

At that, things only got more when Janice married James, he seemed sweet enough at first but whenever Janice was gone out on the streets, doing drugs and god knows what else. Leaving her children with the stepdad, he was a horrible man, but much worse when he drank. Every night the same routine, over and over and over again.

No mercy.

No regrets.

It's as if he'd lost his soul, than again he was probably too drunk to remember anything the next day.

Idiot.

Anyway when Janice died, overdosed on something or other. That was the last strike. At the age nine Ruby took her sister and ran away from home.
They lived on the streets for about a year. Weaving in and out of society digging through cans and doing whatever they had too to survive.
But again crap hit the fan, (Some luck.) Ruby and Lily started experiences 'things', monsters, creatures, illusions or whatever they may have been. They started getting attacked early on of age.
Lily and Ruby ran and ran from the beasts pursuing them as long as they could... But one time they couldn't manage to escape. Lily was frail and slow, far too slow to get out of harms way.

Ruby tried her best to protect her younger sister, but failed dishonorably. She had to watch as it ripped her sister apart. From that day on she blamed herself for her sisters death. The beast had tried to kill her as well, but before the beast could devour her, she blacked out. Ruby woke up minutes, hours or maybe even days later, in an alley-way. Dirty, covered in scrapes, dried blood.
It wasn't too long before she was discovered by New York authority's and taken too a foster home. She didn't live such a happy life there, no one wanted her. Those who did weren't all good too her and the ones who were, well...you see, she was a troubled child at that, she tried to tell everyone her story but no one believed her. A troubled and delusional child. That's all they saw her as.
The 'things' that had been happening ceased until 2 years later on her 12th birthday for whatever reason...

Than she was attacked at a new foster-home by a somewhat wolf-like beast but larger and stronger too. Unable to run, she attempted to defend herself. She was small but not as small as her sister, but surely not big enough to possibly fight off this creature. She held a blunt pocketknife she'd stolen previously.(From someplace she can't seem to recall...) She hadn't even of tried to run, fueled by her own rage. She stood her ground, ready to face the other-side knowing there was a slim chance of her winning.
The creature at one point slashed a maiming blow with it's dagger claws scraped across her jaw almost knocking it out of place but giving her a severe gash and a partially crooked jaw. Feeling numb but full of reckless energy she lunged, landing a blow to the creatures side. After a few round abouts it managed to knock the knife out of her hand. Than pinned her, spreading its jaws about to devour her, head first. Just as her sister had been devoured... As she was about to face her death.

As things began to fade something happened. A loud rumbling engine, came speeding in her direction. A tall blurry image of someone or something hopping off what looked like a large bike. The dark menacing growls of the beast on top of her and the shriek sound of piercing flesh. Something gooey and red dripping onto her face blurring her vision.

Then, nothing. Darkness.

Some time later, she woke up in a ditch near a highway. Next to her was a small bag of supplies, a map, some kind of jerky, bandages and a sword.

Unusual, but Ruby didn't complain. A place on the map was entirely circled in messy black sharpie. Which had leaked through the paper. No where else to go, so that's where she headed. On her way there she faced wilder creatures and larger threats than the last. But just as violent and as terrifying as her first encounters.
During her adventure she gained a bit of fighting experience through practice. But, she didn't return to her destination unharmed.

As she came up on half-blood hill, she was weak, covered in blood and badly injured. Tumbling down the hill, trying to escape another ferocious and terrifying beast on her heels. She tumbled and hit her head, knocked unconscious. Next thing she knows, she's in a wide infirmary, covered in bandages, a cool breeze blowing on her face.

Once recovered, nothing happened the first 8 weeks, until one night after playing 'capture-the-flag successfully claiming victory.

A red symbol appeared above her head; red as blood, shining like armor.
She is... the Daughter of Ares.

Physical Appearance: Ruby's no beauty queen, She's a red-head, hair as red as the burning sun before it sets, it's cut short shoulder length tied into a tight messy ponytail. She has brown eyes, almost a red but more like reddish brown. You can't see the rest of her face, which is always covered by a black bandana, even while she sleeps. A fashionable scar, is above her left eye, up across her eyebrow. She's small, but muscular.(not like super-hero muscular but fitness-addict muscular) Her camp-halfblood T-shirt is tattered and torn, but she wears a thick vest on the outside, and an ugly camo jacket which she almost always wears. She's fond of army pants, and wears a loose pair of camouflage cargo pants that's held up by her belt. The belts probably the only magical thing she owns, it can store pretty much any object no matter how big or how small. She has a strap-vest which she wears over her chest that holds her 'knives'. Which she sharpens in her free-time. She also has a sword with dangles from one of the straps on her belt secured completely. Her hairs always messy and always dirty, she wears a black headband. Few scars on her knees, but her knuckles are badly deformed and scarred from punching things or people. It's rumored that Ruby punches the ironwood trees outside her cabin so that her knuckles will become more dense and cause more brutality to her enemies when she fights.


Personality: Like most Ares kids, she thinks she hot stuff. She's your common neighborhood bully, picks on the weak and completely and brutally desolates the tough. If you think your tough when you meet her you got another thing coming. But don't get me wrong, just because she thinks she's tougher than iron. Doesn't mean she is, tough on the outside but corroded on the inside. She'll take on anyone, doesn't mean she'll succeed. One thing is for sure is she HATES losing but often does. (That's just how it is..)Ruby's anything but perfect, but no one is right? Her one fatal flaw, is that she's over-ambitious. She thinks she can do anything and handle anything which tends to get her into tight spaces that she can't get out of. She'd take on an entire army of hellhounds if she had too. That could be a good thing if she could manage it but a lack of self-control will send you spiraling down.

She's not all bad, trust me. Once in a rare moon she'll open up to a few and protect whomever she befriends AS LONG as you don't betray or disown her. She's a loyal friend and family member. She'll protect her own but doesn't like to be protected. One of her famous mottos is "If I can't take care of myself, than I'm not even worthy of being an Ares child. If I can't breathe my own air. Eat my own food, or mend my own wounds, even take my own steps. Than I might as well die cause If I can't manage to do that I'm not worthy of what I am."





Fatal Flaw: Ruby's anything but perfect, but no one is right? Her one fatal flaw, is that she's over-ambitious. She thinks she can do anything and handle anything which tends to get her into tight spaces that she can't get out of. She'd take on an entire army of hellhounds if she had too.




Talents: Like most children of Ares, she has enhanced strength, swiftness and so on. Like I've mentioned before she's practically an expert in hand to hand combat. (Basically combat without weapons or anything aiding you but your fists and other body parts)But that doesn't mean she can out-match a older and more knowledgably skilled camper. She's pretty witty when it comes to fighting so there are a few tricks up the sleeve. Her experience with weapons is lacking, even though I'm sure some of the older campers could tromp her. Ruby's extreme devotion to the battle field is anything but normal but it pays off in it's own way. She has some knowledge in the medical field, since she prefers to patch herself up when she's injured.

Weapons:

-The celestial sword she received in her history she's kept and nicknamed; Σπαθί των Καταραμένων which translates to Sword of the damned. It's serrated so it gives it a little more slice.

-A baseball bat with sharp nails driven into the tip for a dash of creativity.

-Four small bronze weighted throwing knives. Nothing too fancy, plain and simple.

(She's not very good with her sword. (About average) Ruby's a decent knife thrower though I must say.)




Other: Likes: She's fond of being on her own. She's not a complete loner but she does like to be by herself sometimes...(Every wolf needs a pack.)

Favorite Foods and Beverages: Barbeque Chips and Hot sauce. YES I said it, her favorite drink and food is barbeque chips and hot sauce. She'll smother the chips in hot sauce like nachos or just drink the sauce right out of the bottle.

Dislikes: Oooh this is a long one...okay um here we go! (And a list of reasons WHY she hates them)
(I'm gonna do this from RUBY'S point of view (First point of view)

Cats: "Cats are bad luck"

Snakes: "Their creepy...freakin nasty creatures...blah. All scaley and with no legs or anything it's just. Unnatural."

Apollo kids: "Too self conceived, like the Aphrodite kids."

Hades kids: "Even I don't like too much negativity. Not to mention I have a few bones to pick with Hades for all the hell-creatures that he send after me and....well just me."

Poseidon kids:"I just don't like them."
(She fears water. Mostly because of an almost-death experience she had as a kid. So she just fears them pretty much..she won't admit it but she does.)


Zeus kids (Except for a rare few depending on the sibling) "Too cocky and stuck up because of who their daddy is."

Athena children: Know it all's

Hephaestus kids: They think their bad just because of how big they are. Well guess what? I'm big too!

Demeter children: "Too weak." (In her opinion)

Sweets: Ew, yuck, yuck and YUCK! Too sweet I prefer my meat thank you very much.

Sleeping in/Over-sleeping: "I got a whole day to be training my dogs and myself, prepping my weapons and thinking up new fighting moves. I cannot afford to sleep in."

Under sleeping: "Do you really...want to see, what I'm like when I don't get my beauty sleep?"

Art: "I'll leave the 'art' to someone who actually cares about it."

Math: "Math is for those who actually have 'time' to do it."

Science: "Booooring."

History: "Unless it involves War, Violence, or anything to-do with Rock N Roll of Nazi's. I DON'T CARE."

(and practically every other subject "EXCEPT" PE, Reading and Lunch.)

Being talked down too or underestimated: "I don't like being talked down too..I'm not a child, I'm not your sweetheart and I sure as hell ain't weak!"

She's a daddy's girl so she absolutely won't allow anyone else to be in the spotlight in daddy's eyes but HER: "He's my father, what the hell else am I suppose to do? He's the only real family I got left. And if you can't work harder than I can to get that crumb of attention from him. Than you don't deserve it."

Young, small, snot-nosed, annoying little children: "For the last time...EW."

Small dogs: "I prefer my dogs, big and powerful. My two pure-breds could use those little dogs as chew toys."

People who act like they're better than anyone else (Hypocritical..): "There's always gonna be someone bigger and better than me or you."

Most of all, above ANYTHING. She hates Aphrodite, her children, her hair, her face, her EVERYTHING! Aphrodite is the devil in her eyes she won't go near her, she hates hearing her name, you even mention that demon-woman in any good way and she'll pummel you: "I'm sick of getting trampled on by every pancaked doll I see. Your not better than me, you may have beauty but I got a fist of led and I will OWN every single one of your putrid, self serving, bathroom hogging-Sons a b-...JUST UGHHH!!!" "No reason. None at all."

Habits: She has the odd habit of twitching when she's irritated. Her eye will twitch and sometimes her nose or fingers. Now if you get her REALLLY mad she'll start cursing in Greek and rock herself back and forth until she explodes. (Not literally) Now when she starts muttering in Greek that's your warning to RUN. (You've been warned my dearies c: )

Hobbies: Believe it or not as bone-headed Ruby may seem she loves to read. Unlikely for an Ares kid eh? A taste from anything from Horror all the way to Post-Apocalyptic Fiction, to the occasional fantasy. When she's not training, scaring the snot out of newbies or tormenting the Aphrodite children or any other poor soul she spends time reading. Another fond hobby of hers is hunting, despite her love for animals she has a hunger for the hunt. A good trait if she's planning to become a maiden.

Daddy Issues(Not really): Ares (Her dad) Ruby obviously loves her father, for whatever reason. He's all she really has left so...yeah. She respects, yet slightly fears her father all at the same time loves him. Enough to where she'd defend and possibly die for him. She looks up dearly too Ares and worships his love of violence. May not be everyone's cup of tea but whatever..





{I'm still going to stand strong on the pet thing...I believe her relationship with her dogs is essential to the roleplay.}


Seth: (Red sable German Shepherd) http://www.bing.com/images/search?q=red%20sable%20german%20shepherds%20&qs=n&form=QBIR&pq=red%20sable%20german%20shepherds%20&sc=0-0&sp=-1&sk=#view=detail&id=A49A7E46B405DEBE7F4AD716E5A06A35FE9976E2&selectedIndex=63

Tony: (Long haired Red sable German Shepherd) http://www.majicforest.com/IMG_0743-Edit-2.jpg


Story behind the hounds: I'll keep it short and sweet...unlike last time. After she'd began her journey to camp lets just say that jerky didn't last very long. She did what she had to too survive, even if that meant stealing. Ruby would stumble upon the occational farm here and there. One day she came upon a farm that had looked pretty run down.
Turns out it wasn't abandoned, just that the guy who ran the place was a total dutche bag.

He'd beat and torture his animals, Ruby couldn't bear to see them like that. So she devised a 'plan' to help the animals get out of that hellhole. But she came across a problem, two ferocious dogs whom the old man called Mutt#1 and Mutt#2. (What a pig.) They're first reaction to her resulted in violence, they tried to attack her. Well after a bit of coaxing, the last of her beef jerky and some patience. They started to trust her. After the problem was solved she let all the animals out and took in the dogs. Giving them the names of Seth and Tony. (Pretty brave names if I do say so myself.) It took a while but she eventually gained their full trust.

They won't trust anyone but Ruby, plain and simple. She's managed to teach them a few attack commands. So I wouldn't get too close If I were you.

Relationship with the dogs: Very close, Ruby would rather be with her dogs than around other people. Her dogs are usually not far behind her, and often flank her when she goes anywhere. During the time, she was heading towards camp half-blood, they kept her safe, often getting themselves injured in the process. You mess with Ruby, you mess with them. Ruby often uses her dogs to scare off newcomers at camp, or keep pesky Hermes kids and her nosey siblings away from her stuff. (Haha c: )


Trying to keep it simple but interesting...I do hope I succeeded.

(I changed a lot of things...terribly sorry o-o)
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Re: Ruby Dia B. Joan

Post  GeneralArin on Wed Oct 22, 2014 5:30 pm

Out of character, could you justify having the dogs? Usually pets get left in the dust and on the sidelines, mostly irrelevant for the whole rp. What sort of role do you want them to play, or do you have them just to have them?
And IC, where'd you get them? Have they done anything notable? What's your relationship with them?

I'm not sure what your magic weapon does, could you explain it a bit better? Is it essentially a fire-spiky-chain-whip? And you have a lot of weapons. Maybe cut it down the total a bit.

You need to explain the sudden boost in athletic ability and that it can't be the blessings of Ares, since he only gives that for taking down an army or the equivalent.

Focus on one main fatal flaw, or combine them into one solid description.

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Hopefully successful

Post  RubyWillDestroyYou on Sun Oct 26, 2014 1:52 pm

I made a few changes, I hope I hit the target. Let me know If I didn't exactly get the point, or if I'm clear too go.
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Re: Ruby Dia B. Joan

Post  Axel The Bunny on Sat Nov 08, 2014 4:55 am

Alright sorry about the wait, we've been understaffed, and Jake has had her hands full with school. But now I'm officially staff so here you go

Fatal flaw: it sounds to me like your saying she's reckless, has a temper, and is...annoying? arrogant? not really sure. the Fatal flaw is a single personality trait that is blown up to a point where it can directly result in her death or can ruin the character. you need to pick one flaw.

Weapons: the chain whip thing seems rather vague on the specifics. how long can it extend to? what particular form of poison does she use? since poison can come in many forms, and not all is lethal. Also I am kind of unclear on why you want this weapon, since barbed wire is specifically designed to be used for fencing or anti-infantry blockades. I'm not sure it has enough penetration power to actually make the poison very effective. Also this would be a very difficult weapon to use, specially without ending up hurting yourself. I would just stick with regular weapons if I were you, since Ares kids don't need magic weapons anyway.

I'll have to ask Jake if we would allow the dogs or not.

also because i feel like this needs to be stated somewhere, remember that no matter how much training you have gotten in before camp you aren't going to be able to beat more experienced campers. Experience trumps natural talent after all. I'm not saying you would do this, it's more of a formality.




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Post  RubyWillDestroyYou on Tue Nov 11, 2014 5:01 pm

Alright, understood. I apologize for the informalities it might take a few tries but I'll fix the mistakes and such.
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Post  RubyWillDestroyYou on Wed Nov 19, 2014 11:41 am

I attempted to fix some of the over-complicities. I hope I succeeded, I tried to be a little more clear on the fatal flaw, I don't know if it's too clear and needs more detail but I narrowed it down. I got rid of the spikey whip thingy, don't know why I thought that was a good idea? I switched it with a simple sword. Also, touched up on her talents.

Let me know If I need to change anything else again.
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Re: Ruby Dia B. Joan

Post  Axel The Bunny on Wed Nov 19, 2014 1:21 pm

Everything looks good to me, except I'm also gonna need to shoot down the explosives. Knowledge in explosives is something that takes alot of training, there is no "natural talent" for it. It's extremely dangerous, not just to the target but the person making the explosive. People in normal society need a permit simply to handle explosives if i remember correctly.

Fix that and you have my approval. just wait for another staff member to comment.
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Post  RubyWillDestroyYou on Wed Nov 19, 2014 6:35 pm

Alrighty, understood. Thankyou:)
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Post  Catryn Greyling on Wed Nov 19, 2014 10:25 pm

Unfortunately, we only use Celestial bronze weapons here, so you're gonna have to change the Damascus Steel sword thing. Other than that, though, your app looks great, so just fix that up and you're approved for roleplaying. Very Happy
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Post  RubyWillDestroyYou on Sun Feb 15, 2015 1:37 am

I must inform you that I decided to change a few (a lot) of things (well I added more stuff anyhow) Take a look at it and tell me if I've met your requirements pwease c: Please and thankyou.
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Post  Catryn Greyling on Sun Feb 15, 2015 10:59 pm

"successfully maiming a tasteful victory." I do not understand what you mean by that. Please reword for clarification.

I don't think Ares actually has any grudges against Poseidon. He just hated Percy's guts. So there's that.

I believe that's it, just make sure Seth and Tony don't scare the noobs right out of camp. xP Just a few minor edits, and I'll give you my approval. Very Happy
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Post  RubyWillDestroyYou on Sun Feb 15, 2015 11:24 pm

By maiming a tasteful victory, maiming means to wound or injure and by tasteful..like how success is suppose to 'taste' sweet it's a metaphor. So basically she 'maimed' her way to a sweet victory. But I will change it to where it makes more sense c; and thankyou!
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Post  Catryn Greyling on Mon Feb 16, 2015 1:39 am

Oh wait I just realized you probably meant that Ares hates Poseidon kids, not Poseidon himself derp sorry. Although Ares doesn't hate Poseidon kids in general either, it's just Percy and all his sass. xP

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Re: Ruby Dia B. Joan

Post  Cerulaen on Mon Feb 16, 2015 1:28 pm

(Sorry if these all sound blunt, but I literally did not sleep last night because homework. : D)

- Ares does not spare anyone that’s failing in a fight, even—probably especially—his own children. Per the books, Frank had to fight off an entire city of monsters to get the slightest approval from Ares/Mars. So, him being the one that saves her from the monster fight really isn’t plausible at all. Also, you mentioned she was “slashed fatally”…twice. Which means she should’ve been dead. That’s what “fatal” means. I’m also curious how Ruby managed to get away from the monster that killed Lily. You said she “blacked out before the beast could devour her,” but her going unconscious would definitely get her eaten. So I’d like to know what happened there.
- After a staff discussion, I think we decided to veto the magical belt, since it really doesn’t apply to Ares at all, and doesn’t appear necessary. It’s more of a Hephaestus thing to carry around a bunch of random junk to always have on hand.
- As a random note, you say in her dislikes that she hates reading, then say later that she has an unusual love for reading. Just thought I’d mention that.
- It looks like your character…baaaasically hates the entire pantheon. Sure, I understand demigods can have reasons for holding a grudge against a particular god. But you’re saying Ruby hates just about all of them, and for no apparent reason. To the point where it’s ridiculous. If it’s really imperative that she just hates everyone, you need to give actual legitimate reasons for all of them. It’s just kind of breaking my suspension of disbelief.
- For the dogs: I don’t particularly mind them. But they cannot be your personal guard dogs that you can just sic on anyone. That’s being OP, and we actually want the noobs to stay at camp, not be chased off. xP So sure, they can be protective, but no attacking people.
- As a last note…be careful about the “loner” thing. A lot of new people on here seem to think it’s the greatest thing ever to make their character the lonerest of loners, but it can make RPing really hard if you don’t talk to people. Because that’s what RPing is all about! Interacting! So just keep that in mind.
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Post  RubyWillDestroyYou on Mon Feb 16, 2015 2:56 pm

Cerulaen wrote:(Sorry if these all sound blunt, but I literally did not sleep last night because homework. : D)

- Ares does not spare anyone that’s failing in a fight, even—probably especially—his own children. Per the books, Frank had to fight off an entire city of monsters to get the slightest approval from Ares/Mars. So, him being the one that saves her from the monster fight really isn’t plausible at all. Also, you mentioned she was “slashed fatally”…twice. Which means she should’ve been dead. That’s what “fatal” means. I’m also curious how Ruby managed to get away from the monster that killed Lily. You said she “blacked out before the beast could devour her,” but her going unconscious would definitely get her eaten. So I’d like to know what happened there.
- After a staff discussion, I think we decided to veto the magical belt, since it really doesn’t apply to Ares at all, and doesn’t appear necessary. It’s more of a Hephaestus thing to carry around a bunch of random junk to always have on hand.
- As a random note, you say in her dislikes that she hates reading, then say later that she has an unusual love for reading. Just thought I’d mention that.
- It looks like your character…baaaasically hates the entire pantheon. Sure, I understand demigods can have reasons for holding a grudge against a particular god. But you’re saying Ruby hates just about all of them, and for no apparent reason. To the point where it’s ridiculous. If it’s really imperative that she just hates everyone, you need to give actual legitimate reasons for all of them. It’s just kind of breaking my suspension of disbelief.
- For the dogs: I don’t particularly mind them. But they cannot be your personal guard dogs that you can just sic on anyone. That’s being OP, and we actually want the noobs to stay at camp, not be chased off. xP So sure, they can be protective, but no attacking people.
- As a last note…be careful about the “loner” thing. A lot of new people on here seem to think it’s the greatest thing ever to make their character the lonerest of loners, but it can make RPing really hard if you don’t talk to people. Because that’s what RPing is all about! Interacting! So just keep that in mind.


*Cracks knuckles* Well than...

-I wasn't emplying that Ares had saved his own child. I am aware that he wouldn't spend the time to save one of his own children...that's just how is character is displayed. It technically could of been anyone...perhaps a close relative of Ruby's? I wasn't quite clear on all her family and at the beginning of her History I stated quote, "I'm not going to lie, most of her life is a mystery even to Ruby. She's known to keep her past a secret and rarely..." and so on. So basically it could've been anyone else besides her father. Not just the got of War rides a motorbike and likes to kill things. c: Also, when she blacked out 'someone' was already saving her so It wouldn't of been a big deal. As for the wording issue, I will replace that word with a more fitting one.

-Aw..I originally created Ruby with that belt. But I can understand, Ruby can do without it's alright.

-I did not notice that.....I will fix that immediately.

-I will give reasons to why she hates all of that stuff, no problemo amiga.

-Aww man, but I like attacking nooberinos :c Alrighty than no attacking people. ;_; You have my word.

-I'll try to make her a lil less lonerish. I mean in some ways she is but I don't want to single her character out too much.


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Post  RubyWillDestroyYou on Mon Feb 16, 2015 4:34 pm

Yay c:
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Post  Cerulaen on Sun Mar 01, 2015 6:49 pm

I have basically no excuses for not replying to this sooner except being on-and-off busy, so I’m just gonna skip that part…
I think I’m down to two things:

1) It’s not mentioned how she manages to live when Lily dies. I’m still not clear on how blacking out saved her life there.
2) It definitely sounds like you were implying Ares, but if you’re saying it’s not him, then fine. However, this is an app that needs to be approved, so we can’t have any blank spaces where “You don’t know what happened.” Or something. If it’s something you want to keep a secret from the majority of the site and don’t want to reveal until later, I understand that, but you’ll need to PM a staff member to get it approved (just PM me if that’s that case). If you literally don’t know, then you either need to come up with a reason or take it out—especially since if it’s someone supposedly related to her, that means they would need to be a demigod and know quite a bit about magic, etc.
3) Also, I think you’ve got a couple minor swear words in there, and even though they’re minor, this is a completely PG site and we don’t allow that here, so just for future reference please censor those out in any of your posts that need them (My character swears like a sailor, so it’s okay, I know it’s hard not to swear with certain personalities. xP Asterisks are your best friend --> *)

Once you’re done with those things, your app will once again be set!

Oops I made three corrections...
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