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Post  Violet Harmon Tue Mar 10, 2015 1:57 am

Name: Violet Harmon

Age: 13

God Parent: Aphrodite

Mortal Family: Benjamin Harmon (Father)

Years in Camp: 1

History: Violet grew up with only her father around. Her mother abandoned them when Violet was only a year old. She never understood why and her father didnt really like to talk about her. But he always said she was beautiful. The most beautiufl woman he had ever seen. Apparently she is wear Violet gets her good looks from. VIolets dad pretty much lets her do what she wants which is how she was able to get her tattoo at such a young age. He just signed the papers without really reading them and off she went. Violet suffers from depressive mood swings thanks to her being abandoned by her mother. She had been to therapy and tried tons of medication, but nothing helps.

In addition to her mood swings, she has a possessive streak that has become overwhelming in her life. But that all changed when she started Camp Over her first year there, she has learned so much. She learned that she has a lot of half brothers and sisters and her mother is Aphrodite, the goddess of beauty. She also learned that she lvoes horses and enjoys stable duty. She also enjoys sword fighting which she found out is odd for a child of Aphrodite. But that just made her unique to some of the other campers.

Physical Appearance: Violet has long brownish blonde hair and brown eyes. She gets dimples when she smiles and has a tattoo of a dragon on her right hip. She usually wears her hair down and straight. She wears little to no makeup.

Personality:  Violet may seem like an innocent little angel, but she is the spawn of Satan in a cute little package. She often goes into depressive mood wings which consist of her muttering to herself about a darkness coming. She is often depressed and doesnt care who sees it.  She has a very short temper that can be set off in an instant. If you are around her when it gets set off, you should be very much afraid of what might happen to you. She often gets into trouble and suffers from a bit of a split personality disorder. She blacks out and doesnt remember anything when he "other half" takes over. She will however, fight to the death for the ones she loves.  While she does not make friends very easily, she does fall in love very fast. If she finds a guy attractive, she will think about him contantly. She is also very posessive and protective over what is hers. She does not share well at all.

Fatal Flaw: Violet has a protective instinct that will probably lead to her own death or shortcoming. She has a possessive nature to her that causes this flaw. She is the most possessive of her father and will kill anyone who threatens his safety. She does not like sharing food, information, or anything that is hers. She gets jealous very easily and will hurt anyone that tries to take what is hers.

Talents: Drawing, sword fighting

Weapons: A dagger that belonged to her mother. Her father gave it to her when she was 12, the year she left for camp when the monsters first began to notice her. It has a pearl handle that is always so shiny you can see your reflection in it.

Other: She likes tacos


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Post  GeneralArin Tue Mar 10, 2015 1:50 pm

Your dad let you get a tattoo at 13?

"but she is the spawn of Satan in a cute little package" Is she something other than depressed on a normal basis? Because 'depressed' doesn't translate 'devil spawn'. Severe depression usually lands more in the 'do nothing, lay down and die' sort of thing.
And her depression is really the only personality aspect that is mentioned. What else is she like? "spawn of Satan" makes it sounds like she's a ferocious troublemaker, has an excessive temper, is extremely aggressive to others, or some combination of the above.
You said she's protective? Why? Is it based on caring for others? A possessiveness? Some other reason I can't think of?  
Then you can also elaborate on how she treats people and things. Expanding on the first two will probably help with this bit, since you can keep expanding outwards from there.

Expand on the fatal flaw a bit. Describe it to us a bit better. (This might help with developing the specific personality more.)

Then tell me about the dagger. You said it was from her mother. Did her dad give it to her?
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Post  Violet Harmon Tue Mar 10, 2015 2:07 pm

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Post  GeneralArin Tue Mar 10, 2015 9:46 pm

Okay, that's a bit better. Just mention the possessiveness in your personality, then maybe give a specific example on the fatal flaw.

Just a bit of advice, from a development and not a strict requirement standpoint, maybe expand your flaw to include all sorts of possessiveness. Like you don't like sharing food, things, or information. Maybe you get jealous easily. That combined with your temper would make things interesting, and could really make you seem like "a spawn of satan". Then maybe you aren't just overly protective in dangerous situations, but also in less dramatic situations.
Like, my character is rather stubborn, and he started with the fatal flaw being just overprotectiveness and loyalty, but it got expanded to stubbornness because he won't back down on things elsewhere either, whether it be ideas or people or arguments. He's just plain stubborn and won't switch gears or switch sides easily. Maybe this character could do a bit of good with that sort of line of thought. Just a suggestion to improve the overall character. Like I said, it looks like you hit the requirements for that, but I think this might help make a better character.

Okay, and then just maybe give a brief rundown of what you've done in your year of camp. That's all I've got. Fix those things and you have my vote. Just wait up for another staff member to comment on.
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Post  Violet Harmon Tue Mar 10, 2015 10:55 pm

I think I got it all down now
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Post  Cerulaen Tue Mar 10, 2015 11:20 pm

Well, I'm immediately biased towards this app because #APHRODITE

Just out of curiosity, any reason she decided on a dragon tattoo? Was it significant, or just to look BA?

Anyways, your changes look good, so I approve. She seems different-ish enough from my own Aphrodite OC for me not to make a stink about. xP Welcome to the site!
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Post  Violet Harmon Wed Mar 11, 2015 1:44 am

Fantastix. And she has just always like dragons and it looks BA
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Post  Cerulaen Wed Mar 11, 2015 10:10 am

Lawl good to know.
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