Second Try Character: Nathan Lewis Bale

Nathan Lewis Bale

Age:
17

God Parent:
Zeus

Mortal Family:
Windy Winston Bale ( Mother)

Years in Camp:  
1 year

History:
Nathan Lewis Bale is the son of the  beautiful woman Windy Winston Bale along with the King God of Olympus Zeus. By the time Nathan was 16 windy had personally trained him and passed on what wisdom she had. When Windy died Nathan was lead to camp half blood. For a year Nathan took part in regular camp activities. It's only recently did Zeus start communicating with his son. This was mainly Nathan's fault because until recently he didn't pray to his father nor tried to rely on the power given to him through heritance.

Physical Appearance:
Nathan is an handsome  young man who has his mother's eyes, both parents light skin tone, and his mother's black hair. His build is skinny but he has an athletic body. His hair is usually kept long and messy. He has no tattoos or anything to his body that stand out.  he has always dressed casual and in comfortable clothes mainly for combative reasons.

Personality:
Ferociously proud and somewhat vain, Nathan likes to be impressive and to be considered special and unique. He is not timid, meek, or self-effacing, and is rarely content with staying in the background or in a subordinate position. He is a natural leader, and does not take orders from others very well. Nathan must have something of his own, something creative - be it a weapon, a project, or whatever - that he can develop and manage according to his own will and vision.

Whatever Nathan does, he does it in a unique, dramatic, individual way. He likes to put his own personal stamp on it. Nathan also has a very strong sense of dignity, self-respect, and personal honor and is deeply offended if someone treats him in a humiliating or dishonorable way. Nathan will rarely confront the offender - he is too proud to do so - but he will lose his affection and respect for them with some cases being the exception to this.

Nathan dislikes pettiness and hates to be snubbed or ignored. He admires others who are strong individuals like himself. When he befriends someone, he is tremendously loyal, sincere, and willing to go to extraordinary lengths to make that person happy. He is very giving and generous, but his gifts are never anonymous - Nathan expects recognition and appreciation for them.

He also expects the intense loyalty that he offers to his dear ones to be reciprocated. Nathan has great heart and courage, and people often look to him for strength, encouragement, and affirmation. He always puts his best face forward and rarely allows others to see him hurting, disheartened, or vulnerable. Nathan also has a very strong need for love, admiration, appreciation, and praise, although he does not like others to realize just how important it is to him.

Nathan has a friendly, affectionate attitude towards others and a great deal of personal charm. His attractiveness is one of the first things others notice about him, and is probably something he cares a great deal about. Nathan gets along well with people and knows how to please them. He has a well honed sense of style and beauty.

He is extremely willful, but he often achieves his desires in a quiet, secretive, or manipulative way. He may be intensely charismatic and wield considerable influence over others, or he may be attracted to similarly powerful, fascinating personalities. Nathan tends to go to extremes in whatever he does, to be compulsive, and he is driven by a sense of mission or destiny. He does not take anything at face value and is always digging beneath the surface for the deeper meaning or real motivations of others.

Fatal Flaw:  
Nathan often has trouble developing relationships with people who are as strong as himself, for he does not really cooperate or share the leading role very easily. If he is not in the leading role, he aspires to be and will compete with the person who is.His outlook on life tends to be very personal and rather self-centered. His own self-expression, self-actualization and self-realization interest Nathan more than anything else.
He feels that if he does his best where he is, the rest of the world will take care of itself. Sometimes Nathan can be to kind hearted and trusting of people. He tries to give people more chances than they deserve and this often gets him in trouble or back fire.

Talents:
He is a great battle tactician and strategist, effectively evaluating situations and devising swift response. To cup with that is his skill in a full arsenal of wushu martial arts, unarmed. Which he received from a young age. He isn't too shy when it comes to working with computers and other devices to aid him. He is pretty physical strong being a well rounded athletic male along with the ability to summon lightning three times a day with a large amount of energy at cost and control preexisting lightning with ease or create small streams of electricity. He , while not having any control of the winds, can within any level of the atmosphere. He is not a fan of animals but can communicate with eagles.

Weapons:
None

Other:
His favorite food is mac and cheese. His favorite color is silver, and yellow foods. He often likes being barefoot and will be unless it's a utter need for shoes.

Okay, first off-- we really don't need to know what Zeus did with your mom.
Bear in mind this is a PG site. There are kids here.
And quite frankly we don't want to read this.

So take out the first part.

And if a god or goddess had it out for you, you would be dead. Please remove that as well.

Camp only gives out bronze, so you wouldn't receive or use an iron anything here.

First and foremost, take those out.

There fixed

Sorry for the delay, Sage.

Demigods have to be claimed by the time they're around 13 or 14, and he's also a son of Zeus, so his aura is stronger. Getting to camp at 16 might be a little late for him. You'll have to age him down, or add a few years to his camp experience, or a mix of both.

You say Windy personally trained  Nathan. What did she train him in, exactly? Do you mean that he's homeschooled? I'm not homeschooled, so I don't really know, but as a single mother she probably has to work to support the two of them and doesn't have the time to homeschool him, if that is indeed the case. And is there a particular reason she's dead now? Nathan's only in his late teens, and I'm assuming his mom's not *that* old, if she caught Zeus's attention, so I'm guessing it's not just a natural death from old age. Maybe it is. Put it in your app. It's okay for Zeus to communicate with Nathan once in a while, but keep in mind that gods are generally not allowed to interfere too much in their children's lives.

His physical appearance looks fine, except we don't know what colour his mother's eyes were, so we don't know what colour his eyes are either. In roleplaying, other members might look to your character's app to be able to describe your charrie, especially with first meetings, so it's best to put it there for reference.

As for his personality, it's good to see that you've put in some negative qualities - vanity, arrogance, a need for attention - in there to balance things out. Even when he helps people, it's a little bit for himself too, because of wanting appreciation, so yeah, that's pretty good. As for things like "people look to him," "people notice his attractiveness first" and "gets along well with people," just keep in mind that in roleplaying, although NPC campers can be said to do that, other people's characters won't necessarily respond that way.

I'm slightly confused by how he admires and is attracted to other strong people, but at the same time doesn't cooperate well with them because he wants to be in the leadership position instead of them. So he likes them, as long as they're not in power over him? You also say he doesn't take people's words at face value, but then in the fatal flaw you say he's too trusting sometimes. Speaking of that, it doesn't really connect with the rest of the fatal flaw, which is about how he puts himself first. So fix that up.

Electronics and demigods don't particularly mesh well, since stuff like phones and such sort of broadcast a demigod's aura, and with him already being a son of Zeus, that miiight not be a good idea for him to mess around a lot with computers. Besides, he has a lot of other skills, and you don't want to overdo it.

And about the wushu martial arts: that's not a common martial art that is practiced in America, and I don't know how long he's been training, so I don't think he can or should become a total master in it. I'd say at best he can be good enough at it to hold his own against one (or two; again, depends on how long he's been training) unarmed opponent (unarmed combat gets kinda dicey when the other person isn't unarmed). People usually default to karate or something for martial arts, and it's probably a lot easier to find karate dojos around anyway, so you could go with that if you want to. But he can't be a master at that either. In any case, unarmed combat isn't effective against monsters, so it's not a huge loss.

"He , while not having any control of the winds, can within any level of the atmosphere." He can what?

So just fix that stuff up, and I think it'll be good. You put in a lot of detail for this app, so kudos for that.