Twilight Hammond

Name: Twilight Hammond
Age: 14
Godly parent: Hephaestus
Mortal family: Alexa Hammond (mother, deceased); Jake Hammond (step-father, alive,); no siblings, only child
Years in camp: 1
History: Twilight was born into a somewhat wealthy family. Her mom worked as a lawyer, but her step-father was a mechanic (still is, has his own business). When she was four, she entered a private school and stayed in the same school until fifth grade. She didn't like it one bit, so she was happy when her dad put her in a normal, public school. Now she's in her Freshman year of high school. She has yet to turn fifteen, making her one of the youngest kids in the class. The reason why she was taken out of the private school is because her mother had died during the summer and so she was put into a public school by her step-father. She helps him out when he's working whenever she can. She's proven (to her step-father at least) to be skilled with mechanical stuff. In middle school, and as a Freshman, tech ed classes were always her favorites.
Physical appearance: First off, Twilight is a teenage girl. She used to have long black hair, but then she cut it off, with permission from her step-father of course. Her eyes are a dark blue with a hint of dark green. She's tall for her age (about 5'6''), and she's strong yet can be gentle. Twilight tends to wear a T-shirt (with a tank top underneath), blue jeans (which she usually has to constantly keep washing), and either sneakers or black combat boots. She does have sweatshirst that she wears in the winter, but only to please her step-father.
Personality: Twilight is an...interesting girl. She can be kind, caring, friendly, helpful, smart, and nice. Yet she can also be cruel, hard, tough, and just plain mean and rude. However, when someone first meets her she is shy, reserved, and quiet. It just depends on her mood, and depending on whatever situation she's in.
Fatal flaw: Twilight's fatal flaw is that she prefers to be alone and to work alone. She's never let her step-father help her with any of her work. Perhaps it is because she's afraid someone will ruin her work (like destroy it or mess it up or something). Maybe it's because she has trust issues. Who knows? Twilight has always been a loner, and she doesn't really want to change that, but if she must, then she will. If she's in a good mood, then is more willing to be in a group, but as mentioned before, she's kinda moody.
Talents: Would excelling at mechanics (and art) count?
Weapons: Well, she does have a hammer, but that's about it. She's never had any real weapons or anything. Although in the private school there was Archery for fifth grade and up, so she knows how to do that at least.
Other: I hope this is good. I probably messed some stuff up, but ah well.

The FF sounds like she's overly independent, correct? also maybe a brief thing saying how her fatal Flaw is fatal.

The personality looks alright but it needs some expanding. What is your character like normally, like when nobody is around? how does she act? The -only other comment I have is that you need to relate your FF to your personality.


other than those the app looks fine to me,, much better than most first revisions of apps we get.

Personality (addition): When she's alone, Twilight tends to talk quietly to herself and is a bit laid back. She prefers keeping that side of her hidden, at least the laid back part. She does talk quietly to herself when others are around sometimes.
FF (addition): If Twilight always insists on being alone, then if she comes up against a monster, she might not be able to defend herself enough and therefore will get killed, tortured, or both. Or maybe something different. Being alone might have some advantages, like peace and quiet, but it can very likely get you killed.
Better?

yep approved wait for another staff member to comment though, I'll toss Jake over here.

Understood

approved

you're clear to RP

Thank you