Damon Plauf

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Damon Plauf

Post  romanleader01 on Thu Jun 28, 2012 6:44 pm

Name: Damon Plauf
Age:14
God Parent: Nike, goddess of Victory
Mortal Family: Michael Plauf (dad)
Years in Camp: 2 years.
Brief History: (born in america) Damon was offered into the titan army, but he instantly refused, knowing he didn't belong there. so he went traveling the states. then he stumbled upon camp half-blood, and was happily welcomed there. currently resides in the Nike cabin.
Physical Appearance: black hoodie, black nikes (get it?) orange hair, and red eyes.
Personality: focused, smart, friendly, and dominant.
Fatal Flaw: arrogance
Talents: predicting the winner of a battle.
Weapons: blades that slide out of his sleeves like the ones from assassin's creed.
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Re: Damon Plauf

Post  Kristina on Thu Jun 28, 2012 10:34 pm

When we say a brief bio, we mean something that tells us about the character but doesn't make us fall asleep while reading. So 1. you need a more descriptive bio. Like add what his home life was like, why he traveled the states. 2. you need to elaborate on the fatal flaw. Explain how his arrogance will be his downfall. 3. you can't really predict the winner of a battle. One, it would kill the whole point of the battle, and two it is impossible to know the outcome of something so random. 3. describe the blades please, not all of us play assassins creed, myself included, and have no idea what you are talking about.

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