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Post  landon styles Wed Feb 20, 2013 2:06 pm

Name: Landon Styles
Age:15
God Parent:Athena
Mortal Family:landons father (james styles) olny know reltive
Years in Camp:2
Brief History: As a child landon was always interested in different subjects school. He found him self drawn to anything to do with war,fighting, heroes and oddly architecture. For his weird hobbies like building with legos even at age 12 he was teased and made fun of. He never paid others much attition always drawn to his books and legos designing intricate buildings. The problem was he had never had a real mother. his father loved him but would always look at him with a pained expansion. when landon would ask what was wrong his father would only mutter that he reminded him so much of his mother. On his 13th birthday landon recived a letter uerging him to find a place called camp half blood. When his father noticed the letter he screamed at landon yelling "GO leave me as she did" so landon ran away. He surched the us for the place he the letter mentioned running from things that attacked him he didnt understand. tired hungry and beaten he limped over half blood hill. sobbing he fell to the ground and passed out. hes lived at cams p half blood ever since. In the two years hes been at camp hes spent alot of time traing to be perpaired for the upcomming hard ships he knows he may face. hes made little if any friends and has kept to him self most of the time.

Physical Appearance: landon is medium height at about 5'9 with black hair and storm gray eyes. he is lean and his muscles defined but he isn't over buff with muscles. he has a glint in his eye that makes people feel hes searching for a weakness in them.

Personality: landon is smarter then most but not to the point of genius. he follows the rule think befor you act.He's a friendly person but will be suspicious of most people till hes had a reason to count you as a true friend. he believes that knowledge is power but you have to have the skills to use that knowledge. Hs is prideful and wont admit he is wrong till thires infuitable proof against him. He likes to bait others in to fighting or testing them self's against him but doesn't ever take it to far. He will lose him self in traing pushing him self to the very limit (he believes that this is the only way to truly improve)

Fatal Flaw: landons fatal flaw is his over abundance of pride. in his mind he is right. he wont back down from any thing. he believes hes trained him self for almost any circumstance and those he hasnt hes more then ready for. He will fight the losing battle holding on the the hope that he will remember something to win his way back to an advantage no matter the coast.

Talents: he is skilled with many wepons but his favorite is the dirk (dagger). hes very skilled at throwing daggers. he fights with a dirk in each hand and two more strapped to his wrists for when he throws them. hes also skilled in crafting and spends more time in the forge then most athena kids. hes very adapt at finding a flaw in someone wether it be in their personalty or their fighting style.

Weapons:two magic dagger that return to their sheath on their own. and one super light weight dirk that allows for slightly faster attacks

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Post  landon styles Wed Feb 20, 2013 2:16 pm

Forgot to add his "power" is if he watches someone wile contrasting olny on them then he can find their "flaw" like the week point in there fighting style or their personalty flaw like what to say to make them angry but this uses all his consternation and is dangerous if already in combat.
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Post  GeneralArin Wed Feb 20, 2013 5:02 pm

Format things: There's an edit button, so click that and you can change the post.
-The Character name isn't filled in, but I think you put his name in the family's name slot. That would be where your dad and any other mortal family goes.

You've been at camp for a while. Have you done anything significant, or just showed up? E.G, Jake and Lily also have been there four or five years by now. They're both experienced campers that are well known throughout the camp. Is your character someone who stood out, or didn't really care and just stayed in the background? (Add that information to the Bio)

Time in the forge stood out a bit. Making the occasional prototype is okay, as long as it takes a normal amount of time to make it. The dagger strapped to the wrists part made me think Assassin's Creed, but I'm going to go ahead an assume that's not what you mean.


The awesome by analysis power seems fitting, and I like how you added the catch. I'll let you have it if you'll manage it well and the other Admin agree.
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Post  landon styles Wed Feb 20, 2013 5:24 pm

the wrist daggers are just for easy use in combat and i tweked the time in camp to two years and added an explanation for not standing out
and the time in the forge is more as a hobbie then making any thing serious stuff like his light weight dagger not super powerful and relativity easy to make if you spend the time like you noted
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Post  Kristina Wed Feb 20, 2013 6:28 pm

Okay, everything looks good to me. I don't know if Jake gave a yes or not... so i don't know whether you are fully accepted or not...
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Post  landon styles Wed Feb 20, 2013 6:37 pm

thats what i was trying to figure out lol
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Post  GeneralArin Wed Feb 20, 2013 8:10 pm

lol, sorry I was in a rush.
Approved.
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Post  landon styles Wed Feb 20, 2013 8:26 pm

i was also looking for some feed back on how it came out this is my frist online rp so good or bad shoot it at me plz
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Post  Kristina Wed Feb 20, 2013 8:30 pm

For being a first, it looks pretty good. Especially when compared to other new people and, for example, my very first application ever (it was like 6 years ago and it really sucked... like really badly).
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Post  GeneralArin Wed Feb 20, 2013 8:34 pm

I say it was a good application. The only things that I saw, I commented on.

If you want a deeper commentary:
I think personality was on the shorter side, but it meets the minimum four sentence rule as well as tells enough about your character. They'll grow and get more depth as you roleplay with them, since you'll be faced with choices and times to react to scenarios. Same with Fatal Flaw.
For an example of how it gets to be if you keep it updated after a while, go ahead and check out Jake's character sheet now. This was after years of roleplaying with him here on half-bloods.

Like I said, it looked really good. It was only smaller details that I had to comment on, rather than the 'add more everything' comment.

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Post  landon styles Wed Feb 20, 2013 8:44 pm

ty both for the feed back may try to add some to the flaw and personality if i can think of stuff Smile
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Post  GeneralArin Wed Feb 20, 2013 8:47 pm

Eh, don't try too hard. I guarantee that after playing with him for a bit, you'll discover the finer points of his personality. It's hard to come up with it all right off the bat.

Like I said, Jake's finer details came from ages of roleplaying with him. Just update it if you notice patterns as you're playing.
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Post  landon styles Wed Feb 20, 2013 8:54 pm

well ty for the advice
look forward to rping with you guys when you done with the quest
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Post  GeneralArin Wed Feb 20, 2013 9:08 pm

Same here!
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