Luna Marie Rose

Name: Luna Rose
Age: 14
God Parent: Demeter
Mortal Family: John Rose
Years in camp: One Year.
Brief History: Luna was Home schooled by her father John. she was Ussually found in the Garden outside or walking around in the Local park. Her father was a Nature Lover and worked as a Veteranarian. Demeter met John rose while she had been working on some crops near where John had a job to do. a baby cow was sick and needed John's attention.
    he had found Demeter in the plants and crops. he had given her a smile and had continued on with what he had needed to do. when he was done Demeter was gone. Later in the week he came acrost her again walking around the town. He finally got the Courage to ask her if she would join him for dinner and a movie at his place.
    Luna has a small animal that ussually follows her around camp a small garden snake. Luna had been falling behind in her home schooling lessons with her father, when He started having money troubles. He couldn't focus on his job and Luna's studies both. so He had planned to send Luna to a Private school. Just before she was sent to the Private School Luna was attacked by a hydra while she was in a greek museum enjoying time with her father.
   That is when it was decided that instead of private school. It was time to send Luna to Camp Half Blood. Luna's father had sat her down in the car on the ride to camp and told her about how her mother was the goddess Demeter. He told her why she had seen a Hydra form in front of her. He even told her what he knew about there being other children like her.
     after 2 days of driving, two nights in cheap hotels, and fast food meals. even a waiter who was a vampire like being, John had finally gotten Luna to the opening to Camp half Blood with only a few incidences of running into those who would attack them. The moment Luna stepped past Thalia's Pine tree She saw the most Amazing gardens and all the campers training down below. she saw the Satyrs and the Large White house, even the Lake was shimmering in the sun. Once she finally managed to snap herself out of her daze she made her way down to the Large white house passing by the cabins on the way.
     it wasn't long before there were campers talking with her and showing her around the camp. they had sent her to the hermes cabin, which had been rather crowded at the time. it was only about 2 weeks later while Luna was in the gardens that Demeter finally claimed Luna as her daughter. Luna has been mostly working with the Satyrs and herbs in the garden when not practicing fighting.
   Physical Appearence: Luna has Black hair and Green eyes. she is 5'8" tall. she has a slim figure. an Oval shaped face. Luna has a few freckles on her cheeks something she got from her dad.
    Personality: Luna is normally Quiet, Shy, and somewhat timid. Luna is more like to be found in the Gardens with the Satyrs or to be found talking with the animals. She is a fairly good cook but there is the occasional day she burns some food when in her day dreams. Luna is a day dreamer sometimes getting lost in her thoughts.
  Fatal Flaw: Getting lost in her day dreams alot. During a fight she may hear something and get distracted, or even just before a fight and not even realise that somewhere else in camp something is happening.
 Talent: speeding up plant growth
 Weapons: a set of Daggers.

Ok you need to expand the bio a lot more. Tell of how she was in camp, how she got there, and how Demeter met her father. And the fatal flaw is just one fatal flaw. Describe how it could be her doom I battle how it could somehow kill her.

Ans I'm not sure about that pet of yours......it's very unrealistic.


You've also got the concept of a Demeter kid wrong. Demeter is the greek goddes of the Harvest and fertility of the earth. She has little connection with communicating with animals.
Usually children of Demeter have skills related to plants, such as sppeding up their growth or even sprouting new growth.
I know you'll have to change the parent or rewrite the whole thing. But we have limits too.

I have no problem with the Garden Snake unless you're saying that it can transform into a Hydra and you did nothing to tame it or anything such as that. It just magically appeared and like you and decided to eat you. That won't fly.

The garden Snake is just a Small snake that ussually accompanies Luna around camp and can not transform. she has had the Snake as a pet for several years. rather a harmless pet that is just around.

Ok I have no complains with that just move the story but from Other to the History and you should be good to go.

Sorry for not adding this earlier but please add paragraphs. Big gigantic paragraphs and mounds of words do not bode well for those of us with no life besides the rp realm.

The history looks good but Lily has a point, Demeter doesn't co trip animals can't talk to them. Though here's one that closely resembles her but has that. Cybele, Phrygian goddess of the fertile earth, nature and wild animals
She was later developed into the Greek Religion as Kybele with the same powers and everything.