Astria Striker, hunter of artemis (thanks for the last name Ceru ) Finished now !

Name: Astria Striker
Age: 14(technically 18)
God Parent: Phobos
Mortal Family: Maria striker
Years in hunters: 4
Brief History: Astria grew up in a poor family in a poor neighborhood where she enjoyed spending her days outside playing basket ball, or soccer with her friends, she was not the kind of person who sat around gossiping about the latest trends, that really stereotypical kind of girl, not her cup of tea. But, one thing that Astria always noticed was that animals, and sometimes even people, tended to stray away from her. At first she thought it was just because she was ugly or something. But then when she realized that it wasn't because it even happened when she wore a beautiful dress for a dance that her mom had been saving up for. So she had no other explanation except that she was just plane weird. And she actually believed herself, for a while she actually believed it, so she lived her life in solitude, besides school,  in her room playing old video games like Galaga and Pac-man on her laptop.
Of course during this time of solitude Astria's relation ship with her mom had deteriorated to nothing. Some times they would be nice to each other, but other times they would have verbal fights with each other, all because of a thought Astria had about her being a weirdo and no one liking her. But eventually, Astria got tired of the fighting and the hiding, and so she stopped, she just figured she wouldn't care what other people think of her anymore, and hopefully mend the bonds she had broken between her mother. But before that, she and her mother had one last battle, they both fought fiercely, and after some crying and more fighting, Astria left her house and her mom behind her, she was furious and  in the heat of the moment she had no idea what she was doing, but she did.\

Astria ran away from her street and her town. And when sense finally took back control over her, Astria was completely lost in the big city. And with no home, and no other family she was forced onto the streets living as a homeless person for a month, begging for money/food, although most people tended to stray away from her, But she did find company with spiders, and chipmunks and other various animals you might find in a house but that don't generally belong there, most where animals that people feared, witch didn't really help her win over people that might want to give her something to eat. But after a month of living out on the streets the goddess Artemis came to her, she told her about the gods and that they did exist, for a while Astria refused to believe her, but when she brought her to the hunters camp and offered her food and shelter. Well of course she would by into the whole "the gods are real thing " if it meant she could have a place to live and food to eat, and infinite youth without annoying and gross boys too ! this would be fantastic. After she had defeated monsters on the hunters trips, Astria began believing in the gods, and then after 4 months of being a hunter, she was claimed by her father phobos, that was when she had finally decided to believe in the gods, and she had been In the hunters and believing ever since (sorry for the corny ending, im terrible with them )
Physical Appearance:
Hair: Astria has long, wavy brown hair that goes down to her shoulder blades.
Eyes: Light green eyes
physique: is about average hight for her age at 5'5, with the average amount of muscles for her age as well.
skin: Tanned skin (from being outside in the sun so long)
Clothes: Wears a light green jacket with black strips going down it, underneath it is a plane grey t-shirt, she wears jeans, and red and black nike shoes with silver laces(in the spirit of being a hunter, she had nothing else that's silver)  
Personality: Astria is a very sociable person now that she's no longer living in her room with only her mom's fighting as a social hour. She enjoys telling the other hunters jokes she found funny, since unlike the mortals, they didn't really mind her presence, it was weird, but she enjoyed it. And as of being a sociable person she also tried her hardest to be nice, it wouldn't be fun living with a bunch of people that all hated you, so she did her best to keep a good reputation.
Fatal Flaw: Needs the approval of other people. After her almost entire life of being rejected by people at school, on the streets, she has now become very sensitive to people calling her a freak, or just straight out staying away from her, if a monster where to use this to it's advantage it could end badly for Astria.
Talents: Since Astria is a daughter of phobos she can manipulate peoples fears and make them curl up into a ball and do the armadillo, she can also figure out what people are afraid of by there reactions to different things someone  else might not notice. She is also a talented archer and swordsmen, althought she still needs some work.
Weapons: standard hunter bow and arrows, as well as a nail polish container, that when twisted turns into her trusty celestial bronze sword named Nightmare  
Other: sorry if the appearance looks like Ceruleans... her's was like my example..

The only thing I can think of is rewording the fatal flaw so it's more of a personality shortcoming. Like a dependance on approval or other people's opinions. I don't usually allow straight up fears, since its usually closer related to experiences than personality.

i changed around the words a little bit. is that any better ?

Okay. Looks good to me.

There are a lot of grammatical errors in the bio that makes it difficult to understand, but I think I got the jist of it. Long story short, she gets rejected by society and by her mother, so she runs away and lives on the streets, starving, and she joins Artemis for the sole reason that she needed shelter and food, yes? Not missing anything? Very well, approved.

yeah i need to start looking over my posts before i post them

You can post in the Hunters topic now Alex, we're about to do Kylie's Lieutenant ceremony.