Persia, daughter of Poseidon

Before you go anywhere else I don't think the admins will allow another child of Posieden. Right now we've got 2 and him being apart of the big 3 makes him more powerful therefore his children stronger than the regular demigod. So in which case is why we have a limit for them since its not very fun with a hundred power crazy demigods on one site. I think that Zues might be open and for Hades there's none that are active as of right now. And also I'm not an admin I'm just trying to help you with this stuff and hopefully I won't get yelled at for doing this. But anyways if you need any help with your charrie just sen me a pm and we can discuss it.

Ooh cool, my first official character application review! ^-^
So anyway, Andrew is totally right. I, as the only other poseidon kid that has been active on this site apart from Kris, have never seen a Poseidon kid accepted. And sine i've been here for almost 3 years now, I'm pretty sure you won't get in. You should consider choosing another godly parent. And judging on how much you've written so far, you'll need a lot more informations. Trust me, this application form is one of the simplest that i've seen in all of the RP sites i've been at. So consider these, and you'll be all set.

Oh, look! That's my friend!
Just telling ya, if you get to see this, then maybe you could change to Athena.
(As I know, that was your second option )

(Sorry if I'm butting in.)

Alright guys, from now, if you want to comment on a post then do so on PM. Alrighty?by the way, I'd say a no no to Athena as well. It's the top populated!

Admin cut in!

Guys seriously... I have said it before, unless you are Lily or an admin, do not post on the character app... PM the person if you really want to tell them something.

No Athena or Apollo kids...

If you want to be a child of Poseidon, the application has to be up to my standards and that means it better be hella amazing. Also don't switch view points when talking about your character... That's all I have to say for now.

Okay, so I changed it a lot with the help of my lovely friend Syl...
I finished up the things I didn't do, and I added a lot more to the bio and other things.

I don't expect mine to be up to your standards, though, so I'll probably change my parent after you give me feedback, which will be so helpful. Thanks!

Well, it's slightly....impossible that a child of poseidon is unable to swim...unless if she's afraid of drowning. And yes, it isn't very 'hella amazing' by Kris's standards. Want an example? Hmm....go to the new characters section and find the post titled 'Lily Evergreen'. That's A girl who rps an Athena girl wanted to ne a poseidon girl and as far as i remeber it was long. Another could very well be Slyvania.
Just overlooking her fatal flaw and personality, a Hades kid would hold. Bianca di angelo once stated in her ghost form that holding grudges is Nico's fatal flaw as well as hers. Besides, Hades has a higher chance, since we had a minority of Hades children. Last one came a year or two ago and disappeared.

EDIT: Her history is also very generic, and being a big three child, wouldn't she have been attacked more frequently? Maybe kicked out a few times? And how can she hold grudges against her initial fight in the park?

Hey! Someone who's not from the US or Japan!

Normally, I let generic half-blood bios slide, since it is a bit hard. Then, you're new, so there's not really any camp stuff to speak of. Normally it sides more to home life and series-of-vague-events-that-got-me-to-camp.
Personality and fatal flaws are not limited to certain lineages. Though you are right in saying that usually they'll follow the god's flaw. But since I like seeing a different fatal flaw than 'Loyalty'...

It just occurred to me that the horse is your only friend.. and you're a Poseidon kid... sorry. I just now caught that. Clever.



Now, one main critique that has nothing to do with being a Poseidon kid: What kind of weapon do you have? All it says is the name.

Honestly, as much as I don't like having yet another Poseidon kid... I find this character rather interesting. Personality wise, if you want to justify it, is more of a stormy sea rather than the calm, easy-going one. (Poseidon had some temper issues.) And you already did say that she was fierce, and the grudges can be more of the strong, hidden currents beneath a calm sea, and the fact that she covers hurts with jokes. So her grudges might be seen more in 'I'm going to joke about it, but all the while I'm planning on how to kill you'. When a hurt's covered up, it's more likely to build up...leading to a outbreak or grudge.

So, all in all, I think it's good.

...though you might want to explain the 'can't swim' thing.
I guess humans still need to learn how to swim, but being able to instinctively control currents to not-drown... and the whole 'can't-drown' thing... Maybe she was just traumatized? I mean, there's plenty of scary water monsters, or possible scary events. Plenty of traumatic events to give you hydrophobia.




...I just realized I wrote a wall of text.
TLDR:
-Tell us what kind of weapon you have.
-Explain the can't swim thing...
-I like it a lot.

Woah, thanks a lot! I'll change it in a sec.
I thought maybe about the "can't swim" thing, because it was hard to think of something. I wanted to add a bit of detail.

As for the weapon, I'd like a bronze sword. I'll change it quickly.
Just a question: Can my sword be anything besides bronze, like Imperial Gold or Stygian Iron? Or maybe I could use wood, steel, or brass.

No impirial gold. That's only for Romans. Staygion Iron( or whatever) is only for Hades kids. There's silver too....but only for hunters.

Mmm, hmm! Thanks for telling me!
Yeah, well, I've changed it now and it doesn't really look much like it changed...
Silver is cool. Maybe I could join the hunters, if I get accepted.

(Hey, my friend's friend is telling me, to go check out Mari Fernandez's application. She just made a new one. Thanks!)
I've checked out your application. No offense, but... it seemed like you were rushing a little.

Actually, this is the newer one. There used to be one that was harder with stats. Far more trickier than this one. Just......don't judge a book by its cover. It may seem rushed and stupid, but I know what I'm doing. Hate to be a little mean, but I'm not that lousy little hot shot you came across one day. Don't underestimate others at a single glance.

Yeah, sure! That's what I thought... since there used to be an Old Applications part. You seem really cool to me. Helpful.

Well, I think you're good. We normally have another admin put in their two cents before final approval.

As for the applications, they normally don't reflect the current ability, since it's from when they first started. (Or when the new applications first came online.) I personally update Jake's application to try and keep up a good example.

Though it's not quite up to my standards for a big three character, I still think it is pretty good. I am gonna say accepted, only because I want to see how the hydrophobia thing will work out with a Poseidon kid.